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, UntitledScribbler, Varied, Student
Commented on Home of Lost Imagination by LunaNitor.
"I loved the way you split up the paragraphs with the single sentences, it really drew emphasis to each paragraph, and almost gave the reader a skeleton to hold on to if they didn't quite follow it.
I must say I didn't really understand what was going on until the end, but the fact that I was unsure made me want to keep on reading, and I liked that! I was also easy to read, not in an overly simplistic storyline way, but in a reader friendly "I want you to understand this" way. The story was complex without being confusing....if that makes sense...hmmm....I know! It was like reading a book, not a textbook. And I don't like the books that are like textbooks, because it takes too much to read them.[...]"
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, jackofalltrades0097, Varied, Hobbyist
Commented on Estranged by Norrolith
"Over all, it's not a horrible piece! Personally, I've never been strong at writing action scenes, and have a hard time conveying the stress of that type of situation, so bravo there!
A few pointers though!
- Repetition of words/phrases - I really only got distracted by it in the first part when you repeated "On the other hand" twice. I have a bad habit of doing this myself, and it's definitely something to look out for during rewrites.
- More showing, less telling - There's a lot of "I did this" or "I look over there", with quite a few sentence breaks. I was told once by an English teacher that when a reader sees a period in a paragraph, it causes them to have a three second pause, which can cause them to get distracted and feel like there's a choppiness. Best thing that I've read that describes this WAY better than I ever could, is THIS article right here. It helped me a tremendous amount in the past, and I have it faved to my bookmarks bar in case I ever forget XD.[...]"
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, Darknessismyfriend, Literature, Hobbyist
Commented on The Dark Ones by UntitledScribbler.
"So I definitely liked it and I definitely was surprised by howit ended and started, it wasn't just some old origin story so good job there. But I would work on pacing, spacing and I guess spelling/grammar and like the comment before maybe add more dialogue outside the story, like i sure as hell know when my teachers are talking I'm not keeping my mouth shut all the the time especially since your myth probably takes a little bit to talk through. And I guess maybe add more of a description of the room and the kids asking question?
And here are the confusing things I noticed. [...]"
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These commenters are determined by you through Nominations (read below for more information). Each month, we will be selecting a couple of amazing commenters based on the comments we have seen in our gallery submissions and elsewhere on deviantART. Anyone on deviantART is applicable for this feature!, UntitledScribbler, Varied, StudentCommented on Home of Lost Imagination by LunaNitor.
Home of Lost Imagination I am fading.
The flashes of our memories play across my vision like home-made movies. Her laughter rings in my ears like constant bells reminding me of what is gone and the picture of her crooked, marvelous smile plasters itself to my memory as if her happiness was nothing more than pure, childhood innocence. I flail my arms, reaching for these slivers of silver memories dissipating inside her brain. She pushes me back into the void of her mind, doomed to dissolve away like the countless memories she made with me. As hard as my invisible presence can, I push back, calling out without vocal cords and trying to rattle some whisper of my existence in her conscious.
I am failing.
So I wrap myself aro
"I loved the way you split up the paragraphs with the single sentences, it really drew emphasis to each paragraph, and almost gave the reader a skeleton to hold on to if they didn't quite follow it.
I must say I didn't really understand what was going on until the end, but the fact that I was unsure made me want to keep on reading, and I liked that! I was also easy to read, not in an overly simplistic storyline way, but in a reader friendly "I want you to understand this" way. The story was complex without being confusing....if that makes sense...hmmm....I know! It was like reading a book, not a textbook. And I don't like the books that are like textbooks, because it takes too much to read them.[...]"
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The Dark OnesAt the start the Dark Ones came, they found an empty place and stood there. The walls of the world began and they made a place to sit. They sat on thrones of gold and gems and knew no end to their power. They created the land and the sea and the creatures and the plants. They made many worlds, but they could not see them. The Dark Ones had created no light in the world and were blind. So they created a light to allow them to see all things.
Soon the Dark Ones became bored of the Making, and made others to serve them. The others came out of the light and saw all things. They stood as the first Ancients. They served the Dark Ones for all things, they created and shaped worlds and creatures and plants. But the light could not see far enough and so the Dark Ones created more lights, smaller lights. The worlds were grouped around the lights and all the plants lent to them.
But nothing grew or aged or began or ended, all things held the life of the Dark Ones. The Dark Ones saw this, and they
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, jackofalltrades0097, Varied, HobbyistCommented on Estranged by Norrolith
EstrangedA quick calculation and I move, sprinting across the gap. A second later a hail of flechettes screams through behind me. I keep moving, not daring to stand up. The pilot of the Tauros must be adapted and more than a little to react that fast. On the other hand it's alone, so that we might have a chance of bringing it down. There aren't many pilots who'd give up so much, so taking one out will be a real victory.
On the other hand's the pilots sacrifice of it's limbs make it insanely fast. All the mental bandwidth that would have gone to it's arms and legs now hosts torrents of battlefield information.
Over the Tac-net I hear Abbot scream for a medic. Wisp says he's on his way, but that he needs a distraction.
“Damm it Abbot.”
We are issued with a single APM, but I need to get in close to use it. The wall I'm hiding behind cracks under a sudden auto-cannon barrage. I keep my head down and my visor shut. The shrapnel from the auto-cannon is worse than a direct hit. A hit kills
"Over all, it's not a horrible piece! Personally, I've never been strong at writing action scenes, and have a hard time conveying the stress of that type of situation, so bravo there!
A few pointers though!
- Repetition of words/phrases - I really only got distracted by it in the first part when you repeated "On the other hand" twice. I have a bad habit of doing this myself, and it's definitely something to look out for during rewrites.
- More showing, less telling - There's a lot of "I did this" or "I look over there", with quite a few sentence breaks. I was told once by an English teacher that when a reader sees a period in a paragraph, it causes them to have a three second pause, which can cause them to get distracted and feel like there's a choppiness. Best thing that I've read that describes this WAY better than I ever could, is THIS article right here. It helped me a tremendous amount in the past, and I have it faved to my bookmarks bar in case I ever forget XD.[...]"
Here is a selection of art created by jackofalltrades0097.
:thumb467662361: :thumb451034415: :thumb427265247:
Have a browse of their Gallery!
, Darknessismyfriend, Literature, HobbyistCommented on The Dark Ones by UntitledScribbler.
The Dark OnesAt the start the Dark Ones came, they found an empty place and stood there. The walls of the world began and they made a place to sit. They sat on thrones of gold and gems and knew no end to their power. They created the land and the sea and the creatures and the plants. They made many worlds, but they could not see them. The Dark Ones had created no light in the world and were blind. So they created a light to allow them to see all things.
Soon the Dark Ones became bored of the Making, and made others to serve them. The others came out of the light and saw all things. They stood as the first Ancients. They served the Dark Ones for all things, they created and shaped worlds and creatures and plants. But the light could not see far enough and so the Dark Ones created more lights, smaller lights. The worlds were grouped around the lights and all the plants lent to them.
But nothing grew or aged or began or ended, all things held the life of the Dark Ones. The Dark Ones saw this, and they
"So I definitely liked it and I definitely was surprised by howit ended and started, it wasn't just some old origin story so good job there. But I would work on pacing, spacing and I guess spelling/grammar and like the comment before maybe add more dialogue outside the story, like i sure as hell know when my teachers are talking I'm not keeping my mouth shut all the the time especially since your myth probably takes a little bit to talk through. And I guess maybe add more of a description of the room and the kids asking question?
And here are the confusing things I noticed. [...]"
Here is a selection of art created by Darknessismyfriend.
Murder in Scotland“It’s been a while since I worked a case like this. Three horrible crimes: all of the victim’s members of noble houses. One saddening victim being the King of Scotland himself supposedly murdered in his sleep by his own men. Filthy wretches! May God curse their immortal souls! But of course there is doubt... Good Macbeth in a rage killed those men before they could even deny their crime… What a curious reaction… Not allowing them to stand trial and protest against such accusations, mayhap his rage was out of fear for their words more than love of his King.
Of course that’s why I’m here, Detective and noblewoman; Lady Dyanii Pendragon. I’m one of the best detectives in Europe. I have worked cases around the world no matter how unladylike it may be and today I work the case to solve my King’s murder, as well as investigate the deaths of Lady Macbeth and brave Banquo.” Lady Dyanii said quietly as she headed to the throne ro
Horrid Thing -3 LightMy worlds coming undone.
My secrets are coming to light.
Nothing can be hidden.
I shy away from it hoping and wishing for the soothing darkness.
I hate the light.
It makes me tremble in fright.
You can't hide in the light.
It allows everybody to see inside.
I don't wanna be inspected and dissected for peoples amusement.
That's why I hate the light.
It's bright against my eyes, it burns.
What a sight I must seem.
Cringing in fear. I yearn for dark.
Light... What a horrid thing..
Sometimes I wish the light could just be put out..
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