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I will give you my
hand in battle. Would you give
me yours to save me?
...you would like to be treated yourself.


I wrote this a while ago, but never found the right time to submit.

I think I've found the right time now.

Gandhi said "An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind"

Is it true?




Sometimes I feel so tired. Is everything worth it in the end? Is everyone just taking advantage?

If I was on the receiving end instead, would anyone...

Questions, questions...
:sleep:
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British-Prophetess Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! I've chosen you as the 16th person for my 200 Comments Project Challenge. Basically I'm giving comments to 200 different people in a time frame within a week :D (Big Grin)

Very profound haiku. It really speaks of the better side of human nature and how we must stick by our fellow men in some cases. I think it's important and beneficial for us to remember all of us are mere mortals at the end of the day and if we wished to be respect and love we must treat others in the same way. Sometimes it can be such a difficult task to achieve, but overall it's a reward to help others when they're in dire straights. I really enjoyed this and what you said in this poem makes sense. Very well done :heart:
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3wyl Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey!

I am honoured that you would choose me, though I do think that you would be better off commenting on someone else's piece. xD

Thank you so much for your comment! Nowadays, I can only write haikus. :P

Indeed. I do agree with you. I think a lot of people forget that we're all human...in the face of things like sexuality, race, religion, etc.

Thank you. :hug:
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Malintra-Shadowmoon Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful haiku with a deeper sense.
Concerning technique you kept strict haiku pattern with 5-7-5 syllables.
You have clad such a great message in so less words. Below you have cited Gandhi and while reading the poem, there came another Gandhi quote into my mind: You cannot give any person your hand when it is clenched to a fist.
In my opinion reaching out for someone and then grasping is another symbolism for give and take and should always be from either of the two parts.

Gandhis proverb "An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind" is true but can be meant in two senses, either positive or negative. But this is just my own interpretation of it:
I will go for the negative example first. Eye for an eye. It is as if you give a club in the hands of each and lock them all in. When you will open again who might have survived? Only a few ones or maybe all will be dead, slain by each other in blind anger. Blind without thinking is the negative form of it.
The positive one is some kind of introspection and/or meditation. You close your eyes and relax. Only when you are blind in this way, you can see your inner self and listen to it. You shut the eyes from the cruelties of the world to empty your head - that is a positive form.

Keep up writings haikus and 6-word-stories. You have what it takes to manage it :)

Commented on behalf of ProjectComment's 52 Week Comment Challenge
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3wyl Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah, I usually keep to the strict haiku pattern where syllables are concerned, otherwise I personally don't see the point of writing it in the haiku form. ^^;

I have not heard of that Gandhi quote, but it is quite powerful. :nod:

Yes, I agree with you there.

Hmm.. I am too well attuned to the negative aspects of that quotation. I don't think I've come across the positive aspect too much in my lifetime, generally speaking. :hmm:

That's quite interesting, either way. Thank you so much for opening my own eyes!

Thank you. :hug:
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Malintra-Shadowmoon Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You are very welcome, my dear :)
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Crunchy-Case Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Student Artist
I will.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
:tighthug:
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Crunchy-Case Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011  Student Artist
XD
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ModnarImages Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Short. Simple. *Can't think of the right word for it so I'm going to use* Amazing :) my answer is yes but only if you were to do the same in reverse.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww, thank you. :hug:

I would definitely do the same no questions asked. :D
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ModnarImages Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
:3 :heart:
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ProfessorPhenom Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2009
Any time and every time you need it. :hug:
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, I know you would. :tighthug:
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ProfessorPhenom Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2009
:hug:
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Godzilla725 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2009
I really like this...its been sitting in my inbox for like a week now... I thought it was a short story.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Nah, no short story. :P

I could write one for you though, if you like.

But yes, thank you. :)
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Godzilla725 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2009
I love Haiku's I just suck real bad at writing them.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww... :hug:

You don't have to follow the conventional form. :)
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ShinyFriction Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2009
Very interesting. To save you I shall not indulge in battle then...
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Indeed! Thank you very much for the comment. :)
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fly-high-butterfly14 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2009   Writer
i like this, it seems special. :rose:
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much. :)
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fly-high-butterfly14 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2009   Writer
my pleasure
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KasumiDark Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2009
I should send this to someone I know and maybe change it : I gave you my hand .... yeah should do that è.é
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
If you like. :D
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KasumiDark Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2009
Well I only know people willing to grab my hand when they need someone, but if ou ask for something back, and trust me it was very very small, you get no one in front of you to help back. It was no "mood" help, but a poster !!!!! Yes, just a poster, help me to puchase it, of course I refund .... my hands will stay in my pocket now, I have no envy to help folks anymore.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh...

And if they helped you? Would you help them back?
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KasumiDark Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2009
You mean those I helped and didn't helped me back ? Or some "new" persons that would help me ? If the second option, yes, I would !
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome stuff!

Thank you very much for the comment. :P
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KasumiDark Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2009
Well I told you, I'm a 50/50 person. And this for almost every subject. Though if someone hurt me badly I'm able to do the same .-. *hide* not sure I would do it but I would think about, I know it. But if someone would help me, I would help back if needed, asked or such. But until now, no one really helped me, I helped a lot of people and what I got ? A lot of "slap" .... though, you, you did help me. When we "met", I was more than down !

In the same, I don't think I would refuse my help to someone if asked to me.

You're welcome. ^w^
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:

I guess you've just got to help without expecting anything back. :shrug:
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Spartan-039 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2009
I would. It's only fair and honorable to return the favor of help.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Indeed, thank you. :hug:
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Spartan-039 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2009
:hug: I just wish that, when Jasmine may need me, she will let me help instead of telling me to get away.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Indeed, but it's up to her to realise that.
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Spartan-039 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2009
True. I can only hope that she will.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Indeed! :hug:
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Spartan-039 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2009
:hug: Thank you. I just am.... really stressed lately. And I am trying to handle it the best I can but stress is often hard to handle in large amounts. I know that she's become very stressed lately, with colledge and all. I want to help her with it, and in a way, it might help me. But I have no real way to help even if I wanted to... Hell, in the past, I didn't help the problem... usually I was the problem and I made things througholy difficult for her.... andd I still feel really, really bad for it. For every deed that hurt her. Every one that I remember and the ones I forgot. I want to her to kow that I want to make it up to her in some way, but I don't think she really cares anymore.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmm... =/

You should leave that in the past. If you keep focusing on the past, you'll never live in the future.

Let some time past and maybe express it then. :nod:
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SIXCOOKIES Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2009
I would. That's just how I am. Friends or enemies, when I see that I can help someone, I do it. ^_^
Nice. It's short, but it really makes a point. I like it.
(claps) Very good. ^__^
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww, thank you. :hug:

And yes, I know you would. :glomp:
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Burr-Rose Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2009
I never really understood that quote.

"An eye for an eye and the world goes blind."

But the world didn't poke out it's own eye. Something else poked out the world's eye, and the world struck back. If the world poked out it's own eye then it would stop there cause it's mission of self harm was accomplished. "An eye for an eye" refers to dealing out as much damage as you get, so the world would have to WANT to go blind if it poked out it's eyes.

I prefer the Golden Rule. That is my favorite.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
That made my head spin. ^^;

I think your perception there is interesting, but I don't think it's that... literal.

What's the Golden Rule? O.o
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Burr-Rose Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2009
I think too much and always take things too literally.
:lmao:
You don't know the Golden Rule? That number one rule all kids are taught in pre-school and forget by 3rd grade (at least as far as I know).
"Treat others the way you want to be treated."
But if that was taken into context, 90% of people would be masochists.
:(
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah... That's the golden rule? O.o

A very good point there! I would agree. :nod:
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Burr-Rose Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2009
That's what they called it at my preschool. I don't know about other schools, but I seem to be one of the very few people who actually remember it. I bet it is because I cling to rules that make sense to me and that rule has always made sense to me. I try my best to follow it, too.

People used to wonder about my vengeful tendencies and use that eye for an eye quote on me, but it has never made much sense to me at all. I think people should be treated the way they treat others. There can be no argument over what's fair then. If they treat people like bags of shit, they get treated like bags of shit. If someone goes out of they way to be kind and nice to others, then they get that back at them.

Unfortunately, Life doesn't seem to like that rule, so it doesn't work that way.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I cling to rules myself, but I don't remember the names of them. >.>

Mm-hmm, I know what you mean. Life does actually like that rules... sometimes.

Karma and whatnot. >.<
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Burr-Rose Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2009
Karma is a creeper that no one knows is there til he drugs your drink.
:XD:
I like rules because they keep me out of places I don't feel like going to. Like jail.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
:lmao:

Ooh... yes. >.>
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Orangekoolaid Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2009   Writer
Good impact.
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