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I will give you my
hand in battle. Would you give
me yours to save me?
...you would like to be treated yourself.


I wrote this a while ago, but never found the right time to submit.

I think I've found the right time now.

Gandhi said "An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind"

Is it true?




Sometimes I feel so tired. Is everything worth it in the end? Is everyone just taking advantage?

If I was on the receiving end instead, would anyone...

Questions, questions...
:sleep:
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British-Prophetess Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! I've chosen you as the 16th person for my 200 Comments Project Challenge. Basically I'm giving comments to 200 different people in a time frame within a week :D (Big Grin)

Very profound haiku. It really speaks of the better side of human nature and how we must stick by our fellow men in some cases. I think it's important and beneficial for us to remember all of us are mere mortals at the end of the day and if we wished to be respect and love we must treat others in the same way. Sometimes it can be such a difficult task to achieve, but overall it's a reward to help others when they're in dire straights. I really enjoyed this and what you said in this poem makes sense. Very well done :heart:
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3wyl Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Hey!

I am honoured that you would choose me, though I do think that you would be better off commenting on someone else's piece. xD

Thank you so much for your comment! Nowadays, I can only write haikus. :P

Indeed. I do agree with you. I think a lot of people forget that we're all human...in the face of things like sexuality, race, religion, etc.

Thank you. :hug:
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Malintra-Shadowmoon Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful haiku with a deeper sense.
Concerning technique you kept strict haiku pattern with 5-7-5 syllables.
You have clad such a great message in so less words. Below you have cited Gandhi and while reading the poem, there came another Gandhi quote into my mind: You cannot give any person your hand when it is clenched to a fist.
In my opinion reaching out for someone and then grasping is another symbolism for give and take and should always be from either of the two parts.

Gandhis proverb "An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind" is true but can be meant in two senses, either positive or negative. But this is just my own interpretation of it:
I will go for the negative example first. Eye for an eye. It is as if you give a club in the hands of each and lock them all in. When you will open again who might have survived? Only a few ones or maybe all will be dead, slain by each other in blind anger. Blind without thinking is the negative form of it.
The positive one is some kind of introspection and/or meditation. You close your eyes and relax. Only when you are blind in this way, you can see your inner self and listen to it. You shut the eyes from the cruelties of the world to empty your head - that is a positive form.

Keep up writings haikus and 6-word-stories. You have what it takes to manage it :)

Commented on behalf of ProjectComment's 52 Week Comment Challenge
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3wyl Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Yeah, I usually keep to the strict haiku pattern where syllables are concerned, otherwise I personally don't see the point of writing it in the haiku form. ^^;

I have not heard of that Gandhi quote, but it is quite powerful. :nod:

Yes, I agree with you there.

Hmm.. I am too well attuned to the negative aspects of that quotation. I don't think I've come across the positive aspect too much in my lifetime, generally speaking. :hmm:

That's quite interesting, either way. Thank you so much for opening my own eyes!

Thank you. :hug:
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Malintra-Shadowmoon Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You are very welcome, my dear :)
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Crunchy-Case Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Student Artist
I will.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
:tighthug:
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Crunchy-Case Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011  Student Artist
XD
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ModnarImages Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Short. Simple. *Can't think of the right word for it so I'm going to use* Amazing :) my answer is yes but only if you were to do the same in reverse.
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3wyl Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Aww, thank you. :hug:

I would definitely do the same no questions asked. :D
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